Wednesday, August 7, 2024

Babita's Blunder (658 words)

When Sekhar mentioned over morning coffee that he would be away in Washington for two days on official work, Babita demurred. She had never stayed alone in this place. Though her house in Fort Lauderdale was independent, there were many adjoining houses on both sides. She was by nature timid.

Sekhar said with finality” Look honey, I cannot put off this trip. I will leave tomorrow morning and may have to be away for one night. I will be back by day after tomorrow night, you can be sure. You have to get adjusted to staying alone. There is no fear here.”

Babita woke up with a start the next day night when she heard a heavy truck pass through the road. Without moving she looked at the clock it was 1 am. Her child was fast asleep on the tiny cot adjacent to their king-size bed. When she opened her eyes fully and looked around, she was shocked to find a dark silhouette of a young man standing by the side of the door.

 The room was dark and Babita never liked the night light in her room as it disturbed her sleep. The street light that found its way through the curtained windows was adequate. She concluded it must be a burglar waiting to enter her bedroom to access the steel almirah. She did not move even a little in panic and had her eyes almost closed as if she were asleep. She cursed Sekhar for having left her alone. The figure came close to the child and stood staring at the child for a moment before moving towards her. When she was shivering in fear about its next step, It strangely tiptoed to another room.

Babita making sure the figure was not there, jumped out of the bed and locked the door. She rang 911 seeking help. In a few minutes, she saw to her relief, a couple of police cars with coloured lights blinking screeching to a halt outside her house. There was dazzling light from the cars. She gained confidence when she saw the policemen approaching the door. As she was waiting for the bell to ring, she heard voices in the living room

“You say you didn’t call us. But we got the panic message clearly with this address. Who else are there in the house?” asked one of the policemen in a gruff tone.

“My wife and child are sleeping on the first floor. There must be some mistake somewhere.”Babita heard the reply.

When she came down, she saw Sekhar to her surprise and surmised what had happened. She explained to the policemen how she mistook the shadowy figure for some burglar as her husband was supposed to come only the next day. There were profuse apologies by Sekhar for the surprise he wanted to give his wife and the loud laughter that followed the gaffe before the policemen left.

“Why are you angry? I thought you would be happy at my return. I saw you both asleep and did not want to disturb you. So, I went to the living room and read the unfinished novel. Come up and let us go to bed,” said Sekhar

One month later Sekhar had to go to New York for one day. He promised to come back by the next day evening. Babita was half asleep when she heard some noise possibly from her child. She found the child sleeping soundly. The clock struck 2 am. When she turned to the other side, she found the dark shadow standing near the door. Not to be taken in by her husband’s trick again, she smiled and said “I know you will come. I am waiting for you. Come and lie down by my side”

The shadow stood for a moment and then hesitantly moved towards her bed.

Sekhar was snoring heavily in his room on the 7th floor of Sheraton Manhattan in New York.

 

 

 

26 comments:

  1. Many times when you try to surprise someone you will end up being surprised! I don't feel Babita did any blunder, it was rather Sekhar who sneaked in unannounced!

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  2. Many times when you try to surprise someone you will end up being surprised! When fear of something ends up being a surprise, it will result in fearlessness when it repeats! Haha.

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  3. Appram enna aachu? As readers we deserve a reply. 😊 Regards P K Ramachandran

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  4. Twist... It is Shekar's doppelganger Steven. Steven is really named Shankar, they were separated at the Kumbh Mela. Shankar ened up at an orphanage run by Mother Teresa in Calcutta where he was adopted by an American couple. In the 9/11 attacks Steven lost both his parents, he ended up becoming a professional thief. When he reached Shekar's house that dey he saw Babita dnd Shekar's wedding photo and got shocked.... To be continued... Regards - Mahesh

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  5. One of your best stories. An intriguing end left to reader's imagination. Hope all is well at Shekar's house. Keep posting.

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  6. And then part 2 is left tp reader’s imagination. Ha ha ha ha ha

    ….. chitra

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  7. One of your best stories. An intriguing end left to reader's imagination. Hope all is well at Shekar's house. Keep posting.

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  8. Poor creature! How else would she have reacted and acted!
    Praise the Lord. It is only a story!

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  9. Oh my God! This is an eerie story. I liked it

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  10. Would love a sequel!

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  11. Rama Sampath Kumar : History does not always repeat itself - the twist in the tale is really a good one !! Left to the imagination of the reader to fill in the gaps is certainly interesting…

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  12. Suspenseful storytelling at its best! As they say, to “assume” makes an ass out of you and me. (JJ)

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  13. Aha! Waiting for the next part :)

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  14. Very good end.ramakrishnan.a.

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  15. Orae tension....very good twist! Dhadak dhadak nu heart was beating.....Sandhya

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  16. फिर क्या हुआ 🫣

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    1. I left it for the readers' imagination. You can end the story in many ways. One ending could be as below.
      "As the figure came near and extended its arm to touch her cheek, a shrill cry from the child emanated. Babita sat up with a start from the nightmare profusely sweating and switched on the light by her side.

      She turned to see to her great relief no one in the bedroom and the latch to the door was securely locked as she ensured ever since the earlier incident. She covered the child with a sheet and checked the mobile for any messages. There was one from Shekar, "Honey, would be there by the early morning flight, Love,"
      With a smile, Babita took the unfinished novel and barely after one page, she lapsed into sound sleep.

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  17. Ha ha. Expected it!

    Best wishes and warm regards
    Hemantha Kumar Pamarthy

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  18. I was sent this link by my friend Jagan, your relative. Loved this story, especially the ending. The inevitability of the ending and the surprise factor are two things that at critical to the short story, a writer only told me…. Your story does it elegantly….

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  19. With so much of negativity all round in every aspect of life,the climax would have ended up in a tragedy,but for the positivity of the master blogger.
    The young couple with a small kid are reckless in communication. With mobile phone in hand both could have easily monitored their safety and security with appropriate apps, instead of playing pranks by the husband. The behaviour of the husband is detestable and desrving condemnation. Sometimes Apps do let you down ,that is tragic.
    Ultimately everything is left to The Almighty to decide.
    Jagadeesan

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  20. Thrilling from start to end. But the end is still a suspense. Is it left to the readers imagination? I briefly read your message where you have given an option. Another one could have been a dream for her. Whatever it maybe, it is just too good. Very creative and profound.

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