Monday, September 23, 2024

The Deep Scar (690 words)


Guna, a school dropout, had fallen into bad company and turned to petty theft to fund his drinking and other vices. While he hadn’t yet graduated to serious crimes like housebreaking, he was content picking pockets in crowded markets, stealing boxes at railway stations, and occasionally snatching gold chains on desolate roads at dusk. To make his getaways easier, he rode a stolen scooter. Guna was no stranger to spending short stints in jail, only to return to his old ways as soon as he was released.

His name figured prominently in police records as a suspect, and he was frequently ‘interrogated’ whenever there was a theft involving important people. The deep scar on his neck, the result of a brawl among rival criminal gangs, made him easy to identify.

Guna came from a decent family, but all efforts by his parents and siblings to reform him had failed. After years of futile attempts, they gave up in despair, distancing themselves from his self-destructive path.

As fate would have it, Guna’s next victim was a family member of an influential politician. The politician’s wife and daughter, laden with heavy purchases, were loading their bags into the trunk of their car. As they stepped away to collect more packages from the portico, the bags they had already placed in the trunk mysteriously vanished. In their haste, they had neglected the basic precaution of having one person stand guard. The lapse cost them dearly.

The police swung into action, desperate to catch the culprit. They knew the usual suspects operating in various localities, many of whom they were on familiar terms with. Constable Manickam was assigned to track down Guna, who had gone into hiding. Despite relentless efforts over three days, Manickam was unable to find any leads on Guna’s whereabouts. The pressure was mounting to recover the stolen goods, and the constable knew he had to find Guna at any cost.

Acting on a tip, Manickam headed to a village on the outskirts of the city. It was around 4 p.m. when he arrived, only to be greeted by a scene of chaos. A massive fire had broken out, engulfing a cluster of thatched huts. Gusty winds fed the flames, which spread rapidly from one hut to another, giving the residents little time to salvage their belongings.

Panic-stricken villagers ran in all directions, clutching whatever valuables they could grab. Some carried young children, while others supported elderly parents or hauled boxes, beds, and cooking utensils. The air was thick with black smoke, and the sounds of terrified screams and wails filled the atmosphere.

Manickam's attention was drawn to a young woman who was screaming hysterically that her baby was trapped inside a burning hut. The flames had already consumed most of the structure, and no one dared to enter. Just then, a young man darted towards the burning hut and leapt through the flames into the opening that served as a doorway. Moments later, he emerged, his clothes on fire, cradling a small bundle wrapped in cloth.

He handed the baby to the frantic mother before collapsing to the ground, screaming in agony. Villagers rushed forward, pouring sand and water over him to extinguish the flames. Although badly burned, it appeared he might survive.

Manickam pushed through the crowd to get a closer look at the heroic young man. His heart skipped a beat as he recognized the darkened face and the distinctive deep scar on the young man’s neck. It was Guna.

The crowd around them erupted in praise for Guna’s bravery, marvelling at how he had risked his own life to save a child. The mother’s tears of terror transformed into tears of joy as she clutched her baby to her chest.

Manickam wiped his misty eyes, his heart heavy with conflicting emotions. After a moment, he turned away, deciding to pretend he hadn’t seen the scar. Without a word, he trudged back to his vehicle, leaving the village behind.

 

24 comments:

  1. Heart touching story. Nice

    Chitra

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  2. Good story with a good message! Manickam is a good man! Hope Guna will change!...Sandhya

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  3. A nice story but one which would draw comments like a law-enforcer should not have let emotions come in the way of his duty. But it must be remembered that even the policemen have humanity and such lapses are forgivable, as they are better than turning the other way when it involves a family member or some influential person. -- Thangam

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  4. You have highlighted the complexity of human nature. I was wondering about the potential for change within every individual and the difficult moral choices one encounters in life!

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  5. Every sinner has a future and every saint has a past. Regards - Mahesh

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  6. A lesson to not typecast people as ‘good’ and ‘bad’ I guess! Nice ending.

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  7. The belief in fundamental human goodness is more than an optimistic assertion. It encourages us not only to believe in human goodness but to act in ways that make this goodness visible in our world. Manickam is a
    an example, in this story, leaving aside other legal lapses.

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  8. Guna is like "once a thief always a thief" going by his background.In a spurt of heroic action he could save a child from getting burnt imself suffering burn injury not fatal.
    Manickam having identified Guna in his hideout , should have taken him into custody and arranged his immediate treatnent and after his recovery leave it to Law to take its course . I cannot accept Manickam's departure from the scene as being on humane consideration. He is no one to decide award for heroics,it is a dereliction of his duty.

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  9. Every human bring is good at heart. Circumstances make them God or devil.Goodness is always paid back. PKR

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  10. Guna is a risk taker, for good or bad. Most of us are risk averse, good or bad. (JJ)

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  11. A touching story. To err is human, to forgive, divine.Humanity in different perspectives, both Guna and Manickam have risen beyond normal humans

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  12. This shows that humans possess both good and bad traits. Luckily for our hero, his goodness emerged at the right moment, saving him as well!

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  13. Flashes of goodness do become visible at times, even in an individual perceived to be a blackguard. The policeman, who had the ultimate realisation that Almighty created mankind in that fashion only, perhaps rightfully chose to follow his conscience over the routine call of duty.
    What a story!

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  14. Very nice story.

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  15. What a fitting name for the protagonist! He exhibited opposing gunas in the story. Life is complicated!
    Deepak Raghavan

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  16. Very good story. Ramakrishnan. A.

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  17. 1 Richie rich get punished for their negligence
    2 Bad man turns good in need
    3 Cop is also Human .

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  18. Beautiful story as usual; the highlight of this story is how the confluence of virtue and vices is created to engage the readers' mind - gripping imagination combined with effortless storytelling!

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  19. Great story, perfect title. :)

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  20. Very nice story indeed. There is a golden heart in Guna hiding behind his criminal exterior! And the police man could see it and has given an opportunity to Guna to turn into his true good self. Atin Biswas

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  21. Lovely story.
    Thank you for sharing.

    Best wishes and warm regards
    Hemantha Kumar Pamarthy

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  22. Can people who have committed crimes become truly good people? Personally, I believe most of us are inherently “good,” meaning most of the time when people hurt others, it’s an extension of their own pain or experiences.. but habitual robbers etc. do fall under a different category: motivated by different factors.
    But yes we can turn to be good people despite our past… and in this short story Athimber you have shown that one good and humanitarian deed can just wipe out all the blemishes and win the respect of others around you.
    Here one wonders why Guna in a spur of the moment jumps to help knowing the dangers to his own life- is it because he actually repented on his earlier actions and wanted to do something good? Did he actually realize the impact of all that he had done ? Did this drive him to change? Or was it the basic goodness in him that he jumped to save the kid. Above all, Manickam the police Constable did show empathy and turned away and the thief did not have to face the consequences of his past deeds! This was the highlight. Great story as usual. Rama Sampath Kumar

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  23. Loved the story. Sometimes deep pain and many other incidents can be a major cause for one’s action. Inherently everyone is good. Of course reasons for one’s action - nobody knows. On humanitarian grounds, what the policeman did was absolute right. Just hoping that Guna had changed for good. Loved the sequence of events and the characters are aptly described,

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