Saturday, May 18, 2013

The intruder when it rained

The sky was overcast since morning no doubt, but one did not expect any big rain. Suddenly there was a blinding flash followed by a loud thunder that seemed so near. This did not stop but continued incessantly. It looked as if the sky broke open with torrential rain pounding the glass panes of the hall.
Everyone in the hall became silent for a while. The monthly kitty party of about a dozen young ladies was in full swing at Sunita's place. The silence soon gave way to a riot of laughter and lighthearted banter with the realization that they could beat the rain to the party.

A little while later the door of the hall creaked open slowly. All eyes turned who it could be at this hour.Sunita saw him standing at the door defiantly with legs apart and lips twisted.
Shocked she asked in angry tone "What brought you here?"
In answer he winked at her with a roguish smile and removed his shirt unperturbed by the shaken audience.
Even as the ladies were gasping in disbelief, he continued to traumatize them by taking out his vest.
What a glowing complexion, well proportioned body and charming features, they wondered.
“Stop it, I say. How dare you come here and misbehave like this?”Sunita screamed
When he put his finger on the zip to bring it down, the ladies stood up in dismay partially closing their eyes with fingers half in fear and half in curiosity to know what lay ahead.
They heard the cry in pain when Sunita whacked her four year old boy’s bum asking him to leave the room instantly. There was a roar of laughter followed by admonition to Sunita from all at her inconsiderate reaction to the little intruder.

The rain had subsided  by then to a mild drizzle.

This post has been written for Prompt of the Month; a feature of Writer's Ezine


  1. Ha ha you never know what they will be upto

  2. Hah , you robbed me off the fantasy that I thought 'd follow.

  3. ha ha :D the kids are unpredictable.

  4. Good one. As always a great twist.

  5. Good one. As always a great twist.

  6. Kids....they know how to attract attention! Nice shortest story, Partha Sir!

  7. The twist was unexpected :).

  8. haha... thats a real fun-shot...
    loved it..
    this twist was never anticipated :P

  9. Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww :D

  10. Would a four=year-old do that? That couldn't be his age. . . :-)

  11. I thought of an insane person,then suddenly the twist appeared.

  12. I knew it! I knew it! :D
    I still enjoyed every word!! :)

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  13. Quiet Interesting story K paratasarthi . Dropping via writersezine blog. Nice take on prompt.