The sky was overcast since
morning no doubt, but one did not expect any big rain. Suddenly there was a
blinding flash followed by a loud thunder that seemed so near. This did not
stop but continued incessantly. It looked as if the sky broke open with
torrential rain pounding the glass panes of the hall.
Everyone in the hall
became silent for a while. The monthly kitty party of about a dozen young
ladies was in full swing at Sunita's place. The silence soon gave way to a riot
of laughter and lighthearted banter with the realization that they could beat
the rain to the party.
A little while later the door of the hall creaked open slowly. All eyes turned who it could be at this hour.Sunita saw him standing at the door defiantly with legs apart and lips twisted.
A little while later the door of the hall creaked open slowly. All eyes turned who it could be at this hour.Sunita saw him standing at the door defiantly with legs apart and lips twisted.
Shocked she asked in
angry tone "What brought you here?"
In answer he winked at
her with a roguish smile and removed his shirt unperturbed by the shaken
audience.
Even as the ladies were
gasping in disbelief, he continued to traumatize them by taking out his vest.
What a glowing
complexion, well proportioned body and charming features, they wondered.
“Stop it, I say. How
dare you come here and misbehave like this?”Sunita screamed
When he put his finger
on the zip to bring it down, the ladies stood up in dismay partially closing
their eyes with fingers half in fear and half in curiosity to know what lay
ahead.
They heard the cry in
pain when Sunita whacked her four year old boy’s bum asking him to leave the
room instantly. There was a roar of laughter followed by admonition to Sunita from
all at her inconsiderate reaction to the little intruder.The rain had subsided by then to a mild drizzle.
This post has been written for Prompt of the Month; a feature of Writer's Ezine
Ha ha ....kids you never know what they will be upto
ReplyDeleteHah , you robbed me off the fantasy that I thought 'd follow.
ReplyDeleteha ha :D the kids are unpredictable.
ReplyDeleteGood one. As always a great twist.
ReplyDeleteGood one. As always a great twist.
ReplyDeleteHahah....
ReplyDeleteWhat an end to the short story.
ReplyDeleteKids....they know how to attract attention! Nice shortest story, Partha Sir!
ReplyDeleteThe twist was unexpected :).
ReplyDeleteHaha ! Here I was expecting an adult. Good one quite a twist in the tale.
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Oh.. that was so cute!!!
ReplyDeleteLol:)..good twist..
ReplyDeletehaha... thats a real fun-shot...
ReplyDeleteloved it..
this twist was never anticipated :P
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ReplyDeleteInteresting twist KP!
ReplyDeleteExcellent End to the story.
ReplyDeleteWould a four=year-old do that? That couldn't be his age. . . :-)
ReplyDeleteI thought of an insane person,then suddenly the twist appeared.
ReplyDeleteI knew it! I knew it! :D
ReplyDeleteI still enjoyed every word!! :)
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DeleteQuiet Interesting story K paratasarthi . Dropping via writersezine blog. Nice take on prompt.
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