It was unusually dark that
night. The heavy rain had stopped, but a persistent drizzle continued,
deepening the gloom in Suguna’s already heavy heart. She sat alone in her
apartment, resting on the sofa, doing nothing in particular. She felt neither
hungry nor sleepy.
Suddenly, the apartment
was plunged into darkness. The wretched electricity department had cut the
power due to waterlogging somewhere nearby. She wanted to light some candles
but couldn’t recall where she had kept them.
In the dim light filtering
through the window, she noticed a figure sitting on the opposite sofa. She
froze. From behind, it looked unmistakably like her father (appa). He hadn’t
been there before the power outage—he must have entered after the lights went
out. The broad shoulders, the smooth, bald crown of his head, and the familiar
way he reclined all pointed to one thing: it was him.
But how could it be? It
had to be a stranger.
The figure rose suddenly
and walked to the window, pulling the curtains aside to let in a sliver of
moonlight. His gait, the way he moved, it was identical to her father’s. Yet
fear kept her rooted. She couldn’t bring herself to move closer. It couldn’t really
be him… could it?
Her mind went back to the
accident on the highway, a few months earlier. She and her father(appa) had
been returning from the mall. He was driving steadily at 70 miles per hour in
the fast lane when a vehicle in the second lane suddenly veered into their
path. Her father had swerved to avoid it and crashed into the divider. Just
before she lost consciousness, she had seen a gaping wound in his upper chest,
blood gushing out. She saw him slump in his seat, motionless.
He hadn’t survived. She
was certain of it.
So, who was this man?
Filled with dread, Suguna
tiptoed toward her bedroom. The apartment, so familiar in daylight, now felt
alien in the dark. She moved slowly, carefully.
Then she heard it.
“Suguna!”
The cry rang out like an
anguished wail, echoing through the apartment. It didn’t sound like someone
calling her name; it sounded like a heart being torn open. Again it came,
louder, more desperate:
“Suguna!”
She froze. The voice
filled her with terror. She couldn’t bring herself to respond or even move
toward the door. She was alone. She couldn’t risk drawing his attention. And
she couldn’t flee either, as he was still in the drawing room.
Then, suddenly, the power
returned. Light flooded the room.
She heard footsteps
approaching. He was coming into her bedroom.
Suguna quickly hid behind
the curtains.
The man’s figure was
stooped, his posture heavy with sorrow. He moved slowly, silently, as if
crushed by grief. He looked around the room, touched the edge of her bed, and
gently ran his fingers over the pillow. Then he walked to the dresser, where
her photo stood in a frame. He stared at it for a long time, eyes filled with
tears. Carefully, with trembling hands, he picked it up, wiped the glass with
his shirt, and brought the picture to his lips.
Groaning through his sobs,
he whispered,
“Suguna… why did you
leave me? I should have died in that accident. You were so young, with your
whole life ahead of you. My years were spent. How cruel God has been…”
He wept openly now, and
Suguna’s heart broke at the sight. This was no stranger. It had to be her
father… revisiting her, in grief.
She stepped forward,
wrapped her arms around him, and whispered,
“Appa, please don’t
cry. I’m right here. I’ll join you when my days are done.”
But he didn’t seem to hear
her voice. He didn’t feel her touch. After a few minutes, he gently placed the
photo back, walked out of the room, switched off the lights, locked the door
behind him, and left.
Suguna followed him to the
front door and watched in silence as he drove away into the night.

Another story with a twist that i did not expect . Enjoyed reading it
ReplyDeleteThe most unexpected twist. Beautifully narrated such that you live/feel the surroundings..
ReplyDeleteA poignant tale, pulling at your heart strings, yet with a twist! Masterpiece!
ReplyDeleteThat was a beautifully narrated story, KP. I had a slight hint when she says, 'he hadn't survived. She was certain of it,' but continued reading, thinking it was just a statement of a grief-stricken daughter. How would she not know? -- Thangam
ReplyDeleteGood one! Didn’t expect this twist.
ReplyDeleteGood story. Ramakrishnan.
ReplyDeleteHallucinations seem real, though they aren't.
ReplyDeleteNice one. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteThe twist was touching. Very emotional story
ReplyDeleteChitra
Rama Sampath Kumar : Lovely! Like the way the story flows! Still guessing - who is the spirit ? Suguna or her father? … Very cleverly left to our imagination? Enjoyed reading ..
ReplyDeleteThis is edge of the seat, nail biting thriller, which Netflix will be ready to air..loved the twists and turns and indeed gripping. I am so amazed at the plethora of plots that you pull out like a magician pulling out rabbits from his hat!!!
ReplyDeleteHigh suspense and twist. 👏 Regards PKR
ReplyDeleteHeart wrenching story... I was tensed through out... Sandhya
ReplyDeleteA touching tale, though leaving much to the readers' imagination! I would like to believe that it was indeed her father in flesh and blood, despite the author's leads! That way, the emotional exchange becomes complete. And that's what we yearn for all the time!
ReplyDeleteThe story started off a little scary but then completely flipped. I love the unexpected twist where it’s the dead mourning the living. Her father grieving Suguna, looking at the photo and unaware she’s there, is heartbreaking and moving. Eerie, emotional, and touching. Beautifully woven story.
ReplyDeleteYou’ve handled the twist so well! Suguna, unaware of her own death caused by the accident is grieving her living father. It’s haunting and deeply moving.
DeleteYour comment brings greater clarity to the story. Thank you!
DeleteDreams seldom come true. Loved the twists and turns!
ReplyDeleteReally a grippy narration and loved the twist!! Really amazed by the stories you come up with everytime!! Great!!
ReplyDeleteVery nicely written. You built up the scene incrementally while describing the emotions of the characters well.
ReplyDeleteLoved the twist. Only you can come up with such an ending. Enjoyed reading the story. Thank you for sharing.
ReplyDeleteWow, a ghost's version. Good twist, didn't expect the end.
ReplyDeleteRead it twice to completely comprehend and understand Suganas the ghost! Love it! You always come up with interesting stories which leave a lasting impression.
ReplyDeleteLovely story with a twist unexpected 😍
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