Sunday, November 16, 2025

The serpent that Meenakshi saw (678 words)


Meenakshi continued to stay at her apartment alone even after her husband's demise. She declined her daughter's pleading to stay with her but comforted her, saying that since her house was close by, they could meet daily. Though past 70, she was keeping fit, except for the pain in her legs and could cook her food. She spent the time watching TV, reading and cooking. She always had her nap at noon.

 It was around 1 pm, and she was woken up from her sleep by the bell. It was Muthu the carpenter who had come. He had done plenty of petty jobs when her husband was alive. He knew plumbing and some electrical work. A handyman, he came whenever asked to come to fix minor repairs. But she had not asked him to come today. Wondering about the purpose of his visit, she opened the grill and asked him, “What brought you here? I trust you are doing well"

"Amma, I always remember Ayya (her husband) and wish to check about your welfare. I also have some other business with you," he replied. He seemed slightly drunk from the smell that emanated when he spoke. She felt she had made a mistake in letting him in, but put on a smiling appearance.

"It is nice of you. It is very hot. Let me get you a glass of cool butter milk, “she said.

When she went in, he surveyed all the sides of the hall. He knew the apartment well as he had worked in all the rooms. There were two bedrooms, and one of them had cots and a steel almirah. Ayya used to get money from it. Things were as they were when he came on the previous occasion.

"Drink this. It is cool," she offered the glass of butter milk. After he had finished, she asked him whether everything was fine.

"Amma, by god's grace, I am fine. Can you bring the silver plate you keep in your puja room?"

She was taken aback at his audacity. She suspected his intentions were not honest and that she was in a piquant situation. Wanting to buy some time, she said," I don't know why you want the silver plate. Any way please wait. I will bring it"

"Please get it. You will know why I asked,” he said with a smirk on his face.

After a couple of minutes, she came trembling to the hall with the silver plate. To her great surprise, she found him taking from his cloth bag a dozen plantains, betel leaves, areca nuts, turmeric sticks and an invitation letter in traditional yellow and pink combination. He wound his towel around his waist and placed the things on the plate. When she looked at him with wonder, he prostrated before her and said, "Amma, I want your blessings for my daughter whose marriage I have fixed. Ayya was like my father. You are the first I have come to invite. It will give me utmost pleasure if you can come and bless the girl"

She felt small and bad at mistaking him and said, “I am happy to hear the good news. Ayya would have been very happy if he were alive. Please wait"

As she gave him two thousand rupees, he said, " Amma, please give it to the girl when you attend the wedding. You must not fail to attend."

Just then, three of Meenakshi's neighbours entered her apartment and asked, " Mami, what for you wanted us. There was some urgency in your tone."

“Please wait. I will tell you presently. Incidentally, he is our carpenter Muthu and known to us for several years. My husband had a liking for him. He has come to invite me to his daughter's wedding."

After Muthu left, she said," When I sent you the message, I thought I saw a venomous serpent enter the house. I realised later there was no serpent, and it was only my foolish imagination. Everything is fine. Thanks for coming"

Not understanding her, the neighbours looked at each other with a quizzical expression as they left.

 

 

 

23 comments:

  1. Very nice. Ramakrishnan.

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  2. A good write up. We see the world and the people , just the way we perceive things and people.

    Chitra

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  3. The old people living alone are most often scared of being harmed by strangers as well as known persons. It's very natural indeed. It was very wise of Meenakshi to alert her neighbours.
    I must say that the author was able to hold on the suspense till the very end. Atin Biswas

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  4. Nicely written good story!

    Best wishes and warm regards
    Hemantha Kumar Pamarthy

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  5. Well said. It is understandable that a lady staying alone in the house take such precautions. Good.

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  6. It is but natural that an old lady to expect the worst

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  7. Keeping the vulnerability of her situation in view, can anyone really blame Meenakshi for mistaking a rope for a serpent at the beginning!
    Rather, everyone is finally happy and relieved that Muthu ultimately turned out to be a rope and not a serpent.

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  8. Every situation likely to be confronted by Sr Ctzn is unique and if no harm to self or loss of material has occurred it is providence. There is no single solution for every event.
    Jagadeesan

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  9. It's a good story. Perhaps Meenakshi read the situation right, and she was wise to invite her neighbours. The arrival of the neighbours could have made Muthu change this agenda. In any case, if you stay alone, our antenna should always be up.

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  10. A harmless visit turned into a heartwarming twist when fear gave way to a joyful wedding invitation.

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  11. What a nice story! Innocence, presence of mind, and an apparently hapless septuagenarian, all wrapped around a serpent! My! This is creativity at its best!

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  12. Very natural for Meenakshi to think him for a bad man. She was alone at home and it was afternoon. It was clever of her to message her friends to visit her. Very well narrated story; Kp ....Sandhya

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  13. “Surprises are everywhere in life. And they usually come from misjudging people for being less than they appear.”
    ― Brownell Landrum, Repercussions: DUET stories Volume IV

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  14. Lol...the darting eyes, the slithering tone, the steely looks...what have you in the story to equate Muthu to a serpent...guess, everything lies in the eyes of the beholder! 'Hiss'toric story!!

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  15. We always tend to think negative things first. How the situation nicely turned out into a respectful situation is the soul of the story. The art of weaving this is the expertise of the author. Regards PKR

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  16. Not her fault. We are after all living in a Country where hate is preached as a matter of policy and not love.
    Shantha Rao

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  17. Days are full of surprises. Meenakshi has done the right thing in hinting at the neighbours of her predicament, though deceptively. Good that the scene ended with a wedding invitation from Muthu, and she easily handled her neighbours, which surprised them more.

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  18. Another great story, beautifully written as usual

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  19. Glad the elderlies these days are smart !

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  20. Nice ending! And sensible Mami.

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  21. Meenakshi's fear is quite normal and her presence of mind needs a pat. At times we are mistaken given our circumstances!! Good that she gifted him some money after realising her mistake!! Nice thriller!!

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