It was a small town in Northern India. It was getting
dark and there was a mild drizzle. Savitri with her two-year-old girl on her
arms knocked the door of a nondescript house twice. She was around twenty-seven
and looked younger for her age. There was no response. She knocked again a
little forcefully. She worried that this not going to be as smooth as she expected.
It took long time for the door to open. She saw the tall figure of the man with
an unshaven face and drooping muschtache looking at her quizzically as if
wondering why she was there.
“What do you want? Why have you come here?” he asked
in a voice bereft of emotion. There was no trace of warmth in his tone or any
smile on his face. It was wooden.
“I have your pothi (granddaughter) with me here.
I have no place to go.”
“Yes, I heard that Manoj had been killed in the
skirmish at the border. The Sarkar should have given you enough money. Go to
your folks. Why do you come here when you have not cared to visit us all these
four years?”
“It is not my fault that Manoj kept away from you
people for his own grouse, “she replied. "I have no one on my side. She is your granddaughter
after all.”
He looked straight in her eyes and said in measured
and icy tone that cut her heart rapier like,” You are not wanted here. He
married you against our wishes and from that day we had washed our hands off him.
The girl in your arm is nobody to us. You say she is my pothi (granddaughter). Who
knows the veracity of your word?”
She was shocked to see Manoj’s mother keeping mum at
this blasphemous and veiled accusation. She hung her head in shame and cried
inconsolably even as the little girl tried to wipe the tears of her cheeks. She
became numb at this cruel barb searching for words to answer. She knew that her
father-in-law will neither understand nor accept if she had said that she was
always advising Manoj to patch up with his parents and forgive their anger in
throwing him out. He would not listen and swear in response that he would have
no truck with them. He always said that he loved only one in that family and it
was his younger brother.
“I have no place to go. I am young and cannot stay
alone without harm coming to me. I have this girl who is your granddaughter. I
swear upon that. Please allow me to stay here. I will be a slave in this house.
Please; I beg you, not to throw me out. I will contribute a portion of my pension
to the family. Kindly permit me to reside here. I want my child to grow in the comfort
and security of a home.”
“No,” he bellowed. “You have no place here. Get out before
I throw you out of the compound. I don’t care what happens to you or your ill-
gotten child.” The woman by his side with a stony face did not budge her little
finger.
“Stop this nonsense. I have been hearing all your
blabber all this time to see to what extent you two are depraved. I will not
let down my bhabi and the child. I know Manoj meant no ill will for you both
till you treated him shabbily. What he did was right and I would have done the
same” roared Neeraj her devar , the younger brother of Manoj
The shocked old man shouted back” Will you dare go
against our wishes. I will throw you also out without a penny. Do remember
that.”
“To hell with your money. If bhabi is willing I will
marry her as is our custom, and take care of both for life. We are walking out
of this wretched place this moment once and for all,” he said with a finality.
Dazed as she was, Savitri clasped the extended hand of
Neeraj and moved towards the gate even as the old couple were rendered speechless
at the sudden turn of events.
Nice story with a positive ending. The father in law is a closed minded man who is ready to give up his close family for the sake of his prejudiced ideas. On the other hand Neeraj is a forward thinking and good man. We need more people like Neeraj who will bring about a change in people like his father. People should be more accepting and non- judgemental. Very nice story.
ReplyDeleteI reread the story and had some additional comments. Reading again made me think of Savitri’s dependence and insecurity and this angered me a little in this day and age of empowerment but then I had to remind myself that this is story for a different time in a village setting. For that period and setting this a very forward thinking liberal story where Neeraj was ready to provide support to Savitri without thinking about himself. Lovely story!
DeleteI thought levirate marriage was discontinued in India long time ago.
ReplyDeleteGood story with a nice social message. Happy ending
ReplyDeleteTake care Periappa
Chitra Solomon
I appreciate the zest the passion and the vibrant mind you have and I will never be able to be like what you are at this age. But the story is too common though narration as always is superb. She could have survived without a mans help after all. In my humble opinion!
ReplyDeleteA good story. We need more like Neeraj, but on second thoughts is he taking advantage of her position? As akways good narration.
ReplyDeleteNice story.
ReplyDeleteI pity such people who can’t understand reality and go ahead in life. What made the old man behave the way he did? - is it anger at son’s disobedience, hurt ego or family pride. Be that as it may, it has resulted in his losing his other son as well. Hope people learn a lesson ASAP.
Thanks for sharing the story sir.
Cheers
What a fertile brain you have Sir. Kudos to you and your genes and the food you ate when you were growing up!
ReplyDeleteFor some reason I could not post this comment on the blog page itself.
Keep them coming. Always get a thrill to get the story alert in my inbox.
Nice story. One should understand reality of life.Depicts a good lesson for all of us. You are really too creative.
ReplyDeleteWhile the story is good..I was waiting for the KP twist :)
ReplyDeleteWe need more broad minded people like Neeraj in this selfish, self-centred, narrow minded world.
ReplyDeletevery practical solution. Good for the mother and her daughter. Well narrated story!
ReplyDeleteThe younger brother trying to convince the father to keep them at home seems believable, but his sudden announcement of marriage is not.
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One has to read your story a second time to get to the essence of a ‘small town’ mentality! This violent rejection was a means to punish Savitri for seeking to exercise independent choice, for defying not only the honor of their families but social expectation !
ReplyDeleteThat was a nice read...God always opens one door if all others are shut..very practical, tough and matured decision by the younger brother...
ReplyDeleteI read the story Savithri’s plight. It is a good story. But I could not find it as interesting as your other stories. Yourstories used to be gripping, will have nail biting turn of events. All these were missing in this story. This is not your piece of cake.
ReplyDeleteAnd I guess, this might still be the case in a lot of households.
ReplyDeleteAlways get a thrill to read your stories as I did when I read James Hadley Chase books.Lovely story and as usual great narration.
ReplyDeleteAll is well that ends well with Neeraj keeping the hopes alive for the distraught lady and the daughter.
ReplyDeleteOur country despite all advancements still have caste and community as the underlying factors for a relationship to blossom.
A very short story that ended too soon without the usual twists and turns!
Crisp and well narrated story. However, I would have liked Savitri to be portrayed as a stronger self-sufficient woman. She certainly should not be a pleading one seeking solace from her in-laws didn't care for their son itself.
ReplyDeleteChittappa an entirely different type of story than your usual kind. On the way to creating social reform!
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