The police van screeched to a halt in front of the old apartment complex, its red-and-blue lights reflecting in the puddles on the cracked pavement. Two officers, guns drawn, charged up the stairwell to the second floor, stopping outside apartment 213.
They rang the bell. No answer.
“Try it,” one officer said.
The door creaked open with ease.
Inside, the television blared late-night commercials. The room stank of
blood and cheap air freshener. A young woman, about 25, lay sprawled on the
sofa, her nightgown soaked in red, her lifeless eyes wide open in horror. Deep
stab wounds puckered her torso, blood splattered across the walls.
Standing beside her was a large man in his mid-forties. Faded jeans
with a sweat-stained T-shirt. His hair was wild, and his hands trembled
slightly, coated with drying blood.
One officer approached cautiously, checked the woman’s pulse, then
shone a flashlight into her eyes. He didn’t need to speak, but murmured anyway:
“Dead.”
The second officer turned to the man. “Are you the one who called us
in?”
The man nodded slowly. “You want to know who killed her?” His voice was
cold, detached. “Here. Evidence.”
Before either officer could stop him, he snatched a bloody kitchen
knife from the sofa and stabbed the woman’s body again and again, grunting with
every plunge.
“Drop the knife! Now!” barked the officer, raising his weapon.
The man paused, then let the knife clatter to the floor. He raised his
hands, smirking.
As one officer handcuffed him, the other asked, “Why’d you, do it?”
“Bedroom,” the man said. “Go see for yourself.”
In the dimly lit bedroom, the second officer found another body, this
one male, late twenties, clad in pyjama. A silk tie was wrapped tightly around
his neck. His skull caved in, possibly from the ornate brass lamp now lying
askew on the floor.
“Who’s this?” the officer called out.
“Hell, if I know,” the cuffed man replied from the living room. “First
time I’ve laid eyes on him.”
“The woman. Is she your wife?”
“What do you think? My mistress? Of course, she’s my wife,” the man
spat.
The officer stared at him. “So… why kill them?”
The man laughed, short and manic. “For fun. What kind of stupid
question is that?”
A ringtone pierced the silence. The second officer retrieved a mobile
phone from the dead man’s pyjama pocket. The screen showed a missed call to 100,
placed just minutes earlier. He exchanged a confused glance with his partner.
They called in security from the building gate.
“That man,” the guard said, nodding at the cuffed intruder, “Never seen
him before. The other two? They’ve lived here for years. Married. Quiet. Kept
to themselves.”
The officers looked at one another, piecing it together.
Just as one opened his mouth to speak, “Cut!” shouted a voice
off-camera. “Pack up for the day.” The director seemed happy with the day’s outcome.
Immediately, the tension broke, bringing much relief. Technicians emerged from the shadows. The ‘dead’ actors sat up, yawning. The blood was wiped off with towels. The killer stretched and took a sip from a whisky bottle.
Though the gory illusion was shattered, the air was still thick for a few moments, with morbid cruelty before loud laughter and banter followed.

I thoroughly enjoyed the story—it initially led me to anticipate the usual motives behind such murders, but the unexpected twists truly elevated it. The idea of a killing “for fun” and the final reveal of it all being a staged drama were both brilliantly executed. It made me reflect on the augmented reality of our own lives, where the mind often projects narratives based on ingrained patterns and past experiences. A gripping and thought-provoking read!
ReplyDeleteThank you Mohan!
DeleteAfter reading the entire script, which was narrated in the form of act played, it revealed that it was merely a virtual story of triangle love between a couple of an age difference husband and an extramarital relationship with a same age male partner, which is exactly been portrait in line with the storytelling.
DeleteBased on the story, I don't want to criticize the writer's point of view, but I want to pass a message to viewers that all human beings may have the right to live of own choice within in the frame of laws of social structure.
There shouldn't be any compulsion either by externally or forcefully for an individual's life, so that individual should be compelling to live against the individual liberty or freedom of life.
Thank you for your visit to the blog and for the comment but I think there has been some misunderstanding! This story is not about any judgement on people’s choices or lifestyle.
DeleteThis is just a story portrayed as real but actually a scene out of a movie shoot where a real young couple were murdered by a middle aged man with mental issues.
The filmy end was brought to give a surprise twist.
Sir
DeleteI know that the reply of mine to your blog post was not in accordance with the topic of your exhibit. It is obvious that your creation was absolutely amazing.
You tried to create an exact real ambiance in the scenario that was prominently reflected on each word in the dialog, which was kept carrying the suspension until the next episode. You successfully did the execution as a result of the fishing "cuts" in the ends, and it was announced that how the flim making had been done in one take, which shows the level of flim shooting carried out.
But my purpose was to share my general opinions on the topic to the viewers so that the increasing rate of these kinds of facts prevailing in society should not carry a negative perspective on the public. I took the opportunity to share my views through your blog, and my intentions weren't to make any social commentary. Anyway, thanks for your kind reciprocal reply and necessary feedback to me.
Whew! Nail biting suspense! Anu
ReplyDeleteYou built up the suspense nicely and then bang comes the twist.. delightfully deceitful
ReplyDeleteThank you Lata
Deleteparticularly loved the first twist! fun read as usual, periappa
ReplyDeleteTurns out the only real crime was how good the acting was! The "killer" probably needed that whiskey after all those dramatic grunts!!
ReplyDeleteJanardhan N
A gripping story of suspense. Just when we think he will spill the beans, the twist arrives.
ReplyDeleteDelightfully Deceitful as mentioned above.
All that gripping tale of blood and murder should have ended with some passionate climax and here it fizzled out to studio set!!
ReplyDeleteFor some reason first para itself I guessed movie or serial shooting. Regards - Mahesh
ReplyDeleteA gripping story with the unexpected twist
ReplyDeleteWHAT A STORY! - Incredibly written with the usual panache! And that in 546 words! Absolutely masterful. Kudos
ReplyDeleteWell done! See, you should have been writing mystery/suspense all along ! :-) Arvind
ReplyDeleteVery engaging story till the end. Enjoyed very much.
ReplyDeleteI always look out for the 'twist' in the tale and got it soon:) But the way you narrate the story is mind boggling....so natural!...Sandhya
ReplyDeleteOh no ! We just couldn’t predict the ending - neither in the reel , nor in the story ! Awesome thriller !
ReplyDeleteThe psychopath killer was chilling and eerie, the whole situation felt so real, which made the twist brilliant. Totally didn’t see the film shoot end coming! Very nice!
ReplyDeleteNice twist in the end. You are very good at short stories with twists. 👏👏👏
ReplyDeleteChitra
An awesome thrilling story to read in one breath, enjoyed a lot.
ReplyDeleteNow that's a nice twist!
ReplyDeleteBest wishes and warm regards
Hemantha Kumar Pamarthy
Very good story. Ramakrishnan.
ReplyDeleteThe very clear descriptions that you have given have made the crime scene feel very real ... Enjoyed reading!
ReplyDeletePhew.....I didn't figure the draft at all...... :) good read :) -Meka
ReplyDeleteOh my goodness! What happened here?
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