Sunday, July 15, 2018

The uninvited intruder


“Lochi, make sure you have taken the inhaler just in case you need it,” Lalita shouted to her eight year old daughter from the living room. As an afterthought she added, “Take an extra dress too for any emergency.”
 “I have it, Ma, including the dress in my bag. I am done with the packing.”
“Have you taken tooth brush, paste, comb and such things,” asked a concerned Lalita.
“Ma, I am not going on a long trip. Just one night for a sleepover with my friends. Please do not fret yourself,”
“I know, but this is the first time you are going to spend a night away from me. Get ready. Your friend will be here presently to pick you. It is nearing 8.30pm”
“Ma, can you manage alone? If you wish, I would rather not go.”
“No, I am absolutely fine. Go and enjoy,” said Lalita in a comforting tone.
There were loud beeps from car horn. Lochi and Lalita hurried to the gate. Lochi hugged her mom before boarding the car. Lalita continued to stand at the gate and watched the fading red lights till the car turned at the end of the road.
She slowly walked back to her house. As she turned the key to the door, she noticed a small piece of self-adhesive paper stuck on the door. Wondering who could have done it, she pulled the paper and read a small note scribbled on it.
I know your daughter is away for the night and you are alone. I would be there with you the whole night and give you company. Fear not, I will be kind to you. I will always be behind you.  Do not bother about opening the door. I can find my way in.
Lalita quickly turned round and saw no one. The road was empty and it started drizzling A stray dog barked somewhere in the dark night. She quickly went in and shut the door tight. Shaken with fear and wondering how one could enter the locked house with grilled windows, she switched on the lights in all rooms and searched to see no one was there. She heard a dog bark incessantly not far from the house. With heart pounding as if it would burst, she darted to her room and closed it making sure the door is properly bolted. She moved towards the window and peeped outside only to find no one except that the drizzle has become a steady rain. To make things worse, there were incessant lightening followed by ear splitting thunders. Clutching at her heart, she started reciting her favourite god’s name. She pulled a table with a chair on it and kept it across the door. Wondering how the guy knew that she would be alone, she shuddered at the thought of what could happen to her if he were to come in. She kept awake for long till she dozed off to sleep.
With a startle she woke up when she heard the long bell. The day was bright already. She rushed to the door and called out. “Who is it?”.
“Amma, Lochi here. How long am I to ring the bell?” she said as she came in. On seeing mom, she asked, “What happened to you? You look terrified. I suspected this would happen and that is why I left a note assuring you that God is behind you. Did you not read the note?”
“My god, are you the one that stuck the note on the door? You should have told me, silly girl. I spent the whole night in total fear”
“Did you not see behind the note? Lochi asked innocently.
Lalita turned the crumpled note to see, “Your God “. She read  the contents again and mumbled to herself that everything now fell into their place.


15 comments:

  1. How many times we forget the presence of God in our lives !!!!! Mmmmmmm....
    😊

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  2. Predictable yet gripping. Lovely! Made a good read. Thank you.

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  3. We forget God at the slightest of pretences. The truth is he is always there within US!

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  4. Hahaha. It always amazes me that what we preach to the children we forget. But they imbibe it fully.

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  5. Lovely. We pray so that he protects us but then live in fear. A good read

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  6. Beautiful write up as always! Yes God's presence was well assured by Lochi.

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  7. My heart was going thud thud ...really pounding..
    a short but gripping story with great narrration

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  8. Some people there no of everything and everyone except Him..good one!

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  9. LOL. But why would someone write that crucial part behind, other than to manufacture a twist in the tale? :)

    Destination Infinity

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  10. did you watch the Hindi movie. 'October'? so simple a script yet beautifully directed and narrated. now m just wondering when one of your write ups will take a long stretch..most of your stories are so packed with most of these elements we watch in a movie.
    until i read the note was from the girl the story kept me on the edge!

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  11. Nice, gripping short story. But why did Lochi write "God", behind the note. She should have wrote that right under the message! Such are the quirks of fate, I guess.

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  12. Simple script but beautifully narrated in your style

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  13. Lovely write up pa.. we forget about HIM always and think about evetything else��

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