Tuesday, July 31, 2018

Hana's regret


Hana stood transfixed outside the large footwear section in Soras, a departmental store. What an array of glittering shoes and sandals, she wondered. Surveying all, she fell in love with one high heeled shoe in red leather with strap. 
Dragging her date Reo with her she went in and took the red shoes in hand. Brushing away a sales boy, a young man, possibly the owner from the deferential attitude of the boy, approached her with a smile and said, “Good choice, an exquisite pair from finest leather,”
As he knelt down to try them on her legs, he saw a long scar and looked up. “Are you Hana from Aichi konan college by any chance?” he exclaimed.
Surprised she looked intently at him and said,” Yes, is it Haruto. I cannot forget the mole on your chin. Do you own this store?”
As he nodded his head, she became morose ruing her mistake in rejecting his proposal as he was too poor then for her dream.
Reo instantaneously fell out of her favour.  (174)

FFFAW Challenge-176th
This post is written for the 176th picture prompt in Friday Fiction for Aspiring Writers. The challenge is to write a piece of fiction within 100-175 words based on a photo prompt. Thanks to Priceless Joy for hosting this challenge.




15 comments:

  1. Hmmm not a damsel in distress for sure

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  2. Blessings....
    hmmmmm, serves her right. it would be wonderful if he is already married.

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  3. Good one. Money gives an attractive face to humans. Sadly.

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  4. Well, she has her priorities. Interestingly, my story has a character named Haruto as well.

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  5. Too bad for her that she made the wrong choice back then. Great story!

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  6. I hope Haruto is not in favour of her

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  7. The story started developing well, but I thought the end was a bit abrupt.

    Destination Infinity

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    1. The constraint was the 175 word limit. I agree with you. Should have chosen a different plot. Thanks.

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  8. Her date Reo is just an onlooker? Poor guy.

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  9. I can never narrate such short and crispy ones with the word limit :-)

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  10. While being materialistic is not desirable, it is always healthier to choose a person from a compatible background, because the difference in attitudes is huge. Short, but gripping story!

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