Saturday, August 22, 2020

A promise hastily made

 The young man was in deep debt. The debtors were pressurising him with threats. He was the sole bread winner for parents and younger siblings. His income was hardly adequate to meet the basic needs of the family.  He could see no way out except to take refuge in God at the temple. He took a bath, applied ash marks prominently on his forehead, arms and chest went to the nearest Vinayak temple. He removed his shirt, stood bare bodied before Lord Ganesha praying devoutly with his eyes in tears.

” Show me a way out of this mess I am in. If I am freed of this burden of debts and the onerous task of looking after the family, I promise to you sincerely that I would renounce the world and be your devotee forever. Kindly show your compassion, “he pleaded.

As there was a jostling crowd in the morning, he chose a corner and sat with his eyes closed to chant His name.1008 times keeping his shirt before him.

Many devotees thought him to be a mendicant and dropped coins, notes and even fruits. Engrossed in prayer, he did not notice this. It took a long time for him and just when he completed the count, the temple bell tolled repeatedly and loudly.as if to signify his prayer was answered.’

The young man rose to jump in joy with his eyes closed unknowingly at the amused smiles of the people at the young man jumping madly as if possessed. When he opened his eyes and saw the small crowd around, he was highly embarrassed and bent to pick his shirt. To his utter bewilderment, he saw the coins, currency notes, fruits and surprisingly a lottery ticket too on and around the shirt. He hurriedly picked them all and made a hasty exit.

He thought someone had left an expired and useless lottery ticket. However, his curiosity overcame his impulse to discard it and found the next day was the day for the results. He was hopeful that Lord would not let him down but had not much hope on the lottery ticket. He put his signature and address behind the lottery ticket as a matter of abundant precaution.

The next day when he went to the bazaar, he was thrilled to find the ticket had won him one crore of rupees. All his problems seemed to vanish in a trice like snowflakes before Sun. Lord Vinayaka in His infinite mercy had answered his prayers. He quickly settled the debts, opened a small grocery store for his father and made proper investments to get regular monthly income.

 After a month his conscience pricked that his part of the prayer remained to be fulfilled, when he saw in the bazaar young and beautiful girls walking past him, the array of textile shops with display of beautiful clothes and the bars and beer beckoning him. He had not gone to temple except once after winning the lottery for elaborate puja and offerings.

Unable to bear the guilt and remorse at his being a cheat, he bought himself an ochre robe and gave away the pant and shirt to a beggar. He decided to move away from family and the town., His mind was restless as he sat in the temple in his yellow robes. Tears trickled from his eyes as he realized it was not easy to take to Sanyas.It was a foolish promise made in haste but he cannot fail to keep it. He was in a quandary not knowing how to get out of this tricky situation that he had invited upon himself. His eyes were closed in deep thought at his predicament.

It was then he heard the voice,” Cut, pack up. The day’s shooting is over.”. The garishly rich young man, smiled at the director and readied to get into the sleek car as the door was opened by his chauffeur.

24 comments:

  1. I did not expect this ending. Good one.

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  2. Hmm...

    The end cheated the usual expected turn of a dream being disturbed! 😂😀

    Best wishes and warm regards
    Hemantha Kumar Pamarthy

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  3. Romba Chinna kadhai, yes, but a nice feel good one that brings on a smile automatically .

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  4. Ha ha. Nice twist. Was reading and thought he would keep up his promise.

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  5. Different from your usual stories. A twist and now a turn. Surely the gene was unexpected.

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  6. Unexpected ending; good one!
    Vasudha

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  7. Totally unexpected ending..ghosh..never ever thought of such an ending..but good one it was...so creative pf you as usual and loved the first half which depicted how supreme power almighty has...:)



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  8. Your classic genre sir! Was missing it for long. So nice to have you back in the flow!

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  9. Unexpected end, was waiting for another miracle.

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  10. Great twist - totally your signature style ending !!!! Super!
    Take care, Periappa. Keep writing !
    Chitra Solomon

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  11. Very nice, quite unexpected!

    Srikanth

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  12. Indira ParthasarathyAugust 22, 2020 at 8:50 PM

    Very nice. Great unexpected turning in the end.

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  13. I was so carried away by the 1 crore prize money and my own inclination to become devout, that the end came and jolted me to 'reel time'!
    The master with the twist is back in this story and an outlandish ending that caught your avid readers on the wrong foot!!

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  14. Yes, 'twist in the tale' story teller is back! Enjoyed the story!

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  15. Very surprising end. I like it. I have a lottery joke. A guy in New York prayed to God for 2 years to help him win the lottery. He did not win. One day he got angry at God and started to use bad words against God. God appeared in front of him and told him: Son, I want to help you. But first buy a ticket. Otherwise I cannot help you.

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  16. Another twist and another refreshing story!

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  17. I was going to say that worship is not a barter. But then I read the ending. :) Good one

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  18. I became thoughtful while he got 1 crore by a lottery ticket that this is not your way of writing and what is this going on but the end is of your style sir-once again Great

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  19. Thoroughly enjoyed! Sir, how cleverly you brought out the callousness of the actor .To the actor, it was just another part played by him whereas we, readers, were in torment , wondering if there would be repercussions for failing to fulfill his promise to Lord Ganesha :-)) Ha..ha..,!!

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  20. Sorry i am late, a very interesting story. While our mind Is debating what that person is going to do you have stunned us by giving an unexpected twist. Wonderful and applaudable

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  21. What a twist in the tale, Periappa. Just when I thought that the lottery ticket angle was a cliche, the true story teller in you have the story a great ending. Loved reading this

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  22. Though I didn't know what exactly the ending was, there was some unexpected thing going to happen!

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  23. Classic. Though many mentioned un excepted end but for me it is your signature style of twist.

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