Thursday, October 9, 2025

Across the wall (554 words)

 

Suseela was not happy with the new tenants in the adjacent house. She was by nature helpful and non-interfering, yet something about them unsettled her.

It was a small family of a husband, his wife, and another woman younger than the wife. Soon after moving in, the wife came to Suseela’s house a few times to ask about the neighbourhood, but the younger woman never accompanied her. Suseela was never invited to their home either, nor did the man make any effort to meet her husband.

In their small municipal town, news travelled quickly and easily. Suseela learned that the wife’s name was Champaka and that her husband ran a small business. But Champaka was reserved, even evasive, especially when Suseela gently inquired about the other woman, whom she had assumed to be a relative.

Months passed by before Champaka gradually opened up. One afternoon, when her husband and the younger woman were away, she confided in Suseela.

Champaka’s voice trembled as she spoke. She had been married for seven years but remained childless, a fact her husband never forgave. He abused her constantly, both in words and blows, and made her toil all day like a servant. The younger woman, Nalini, was not a sister or cousin as Suseela had thought, but her husband’s mistress. When Champaka protested, he gave her two choices: to stay silent and serve them both, or leave the house.

With no family to return to and no means to survive, Champaka chose to endure.

Suseela’s heart ached for her. “But Nalini is not even beautiful,” she told her husband later. “Short, stout, with that loud voice… and poor Champaka, she’s so graceful and beautiful.”

Her husband only shrugged. “As long as there’s no complaint or law broken, what can anyone do?”

Life went on. Suseela noticed that Nalini often slipped into the house across the road, the home of a bachelor schoolteacher who also practiced homoeopathy in the evenings. She had heard Nalini tell Champaka that she was getting treatment from him for a stomach ailment, but the long visits made Suseela suspicious. The teacher, too, often seemed at his window, gazing toward Champaka’s house.

“Some secret romance must be brewing,” Suseela thought, sighing for poor Champaka, who remained confined in the house.

Every evening, Suseela prayed that God would make things right for her and that Nalini would run away with the teacher, leaving Champaka in peace.

And one bright morning, her prayer seemed to be answered. Her husband returned from the temple and said, “You won’t believe it. I learn that the teacher has eloped with a woman from the adjacent house!”

Suseela’s heart leapt. “Thank you, my God, Guruvayurappa,” she exclaimed, clasping her hands. Finally, Champaka’s suffering would come to an end!

But Champaka didn’t come by that day, nor the next. Growing anxious, Suseela went to her house to share the good news in person.

When she entered, she stopped short. Nalini was sitting inside : calm, composed, even smug.

“Where’s Champaka?” Suseela asked.

Nalini gave a small, knowing smile. “Don’t you know? Your dear friend Champaka ran away two nights before with the teacher.”

For a moment, Suseela stood speechless. Then, as she turned to leave, a quiet smile spread across her face.

“Good,” she murmured, “A good turn for Champaka, at last.”

 

 

20 comments:

  1. Now this is a juicy store!
    You are back in action, alright! 🤣😂

    Best wishes and warm regards
    Hemantha Kumar Pamarthy

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  2. I guess in those days,, registering a marriage or a divorce was not a necessary practice. These days legal separation through divorce and legal wedding are much needed for a married life. Hope the teacher and Champaka did those for a much deserving happy married life for both of them.

    Chitra

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  3. Very nice story.ramakrishnan.a.

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  4. Well that was an unexpected twist. Gurvayoorappan answered though differently. I firmly believe he does what is best & deserving. As always well narrated.

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  5. Nice story with an unexpected twist in the end!! God decides every move of ours!! This was the correct judgement for Champaka!! Well narrated!! -- Jayanthi

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  6. Beautiful story 🙏

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  7. A twist-filled surprise ending keeps you guessing until the very last moment, leaving you utterly stunned.

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  8. With the last twist in the story there is a reason to be happy by all the characters. Susheela is happy for Champa, Champa is happy for herself for the relief from ill treatment by the husband, Nalini should be happy with the change of her status from mistress and husband also is happy for getting rid of his wife. Super. Regards. PKR

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  9. To spin such a story in mere 554 words is absolute creative mastery - not over language or literature alone, but the myriad shades of human behaviour fuelled by grotesque needs! Beautifully written!

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  10. Looks like Suseela has nothing else to do in her life and only interested in what is happening in her neighbor's house.

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  11. Sailed along with the narrator Suseela by feeling sorry about the miserable life of Champaka and the maltreatment meted out to her by her husband and his mistress.
    And finally, lo and behold, Champaka had the last laugh by eloping with the neighbourhood teacher, an act for which none whatsoever could feel unhappy about!
    What a masterly story about a problem solver par excellence!

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  12. How come Nalini goes to the teacher cum homeopath for treatment of stomach ailment and seems to be making frequent visits. No such visits by Champaka is mentioned in the story
    How Champaka eloped with the teacher,no build up clue,sudden event!
    Jagadeesan

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  13. Really loved this story! It’s simple, natural, and builds up so nicely. The twist at the end was perfect and left such a calm, satisfying feeling. It tied the story beautifully together.

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  14. The twist is double whammy in that Champaka is relieved of her miseries for ever and Nalini got her status elevated to Mrs. from mistress. Sad that Sushi is jobless now with no more juicy news to her platter. Great story telling with so much drama in so few words!

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  15. “Sometimes the best answers to prayer are the ones God doesn't answer.”
    ― Robin Jones Gunn, Surprise Endings

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  16. 🤣😂🤣😂🤣😂🤣
    But how come 🤔🤔🤔....... I understood 💭💭💭
    that it was Nalini........ Champaka didn't even seem to be on talking terms with the teacher cum homeopath..........Mika.

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  17. I knew this twist was coming :)
    Her husband didn't deserve her.

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