"Deepa’s parents had been busy since morning, preparing the house for a visit. The maid had spruced up the place, changing curtains and sofa covers, vacuuming the carpet, and wiping the photo frames. Her dad brought fresh flowers, while her mom bustled in the kitchen making sweets and snacks. They had also bought some Bengali sweets from a nearby stall. One of the prospective bridegroom’s parents had informed them they would arrive after 3 PM to see Deepa.
"Deepa took the day off work, starting her morning with
a relaxing facial at the beauty parlour. After a refreshing shower, she
carefully draped herself in a delicate, saffron silk sari, adorning herself
with matching jewellery, her heart fluttering with anticipation.
"When it was nearing three, her dad sprayed lavender
air freshener in the hall. The aroma of a sandalwood incense stick wafted from
the puja room, mingling with the fragrance of jasmine in the air.
There was a short, hesitant buzz at the door. Her dad rushed
to open it and found a young man in a blue-striped shirt and charcoal grey
pants. He looked tall, handsome, and muscular. He smiled and asked, “Is this Deepa’s
place?”
“Yes, yes, please come in and be seated. We were actually
waiting for you. Has no one else come with you?” The hall was cool with the air
conditioner humming.
“No, it is enough if I meet her. I should have come half an
hour earlier but was held up in a meeting,” he said with a smile. Deepa,
peeping through a small opening in a window from the adjacent room, noticed his
well-aligned sparkling teeth. A cute-looking guy, she thought with some
satisfaction.
“I hope you had no difficulty locating the house,” asked Deepa’s
dad.
“Not at all. It took just 30 minutes to drive from my
office. The ambiance here is good. A bright but cool home you have in sylvan
surroundings,” he said.
“Yes, I bought it ten years back,” he replied as Deepa’s mom
brought a plate full of snacks and sweets.
“Why all these? Where is Deepa?” the young man asked.
“It is customary. Please have some,” Deepa’s dad said,
turning to his wife. “Where is Deepa? Ask her to come. You also come here.”
Deepa came demurely, accompanied by her mother. The young
man stood up and folded his hands in greeting to both of them.
When they were seated, he said with a large smile, “Glad I
could come today. In fact, I have wanted to see you ever since I heard about
you. I could find time only today.”
After some pleasantries, Deepa’s dad stood up and said, “I
will leave you alone so you can discuss matters of mutual interest.”
"Just then, Deepa’s dad heard a car pull up outside,
the gate creaking open. He rushed to see an elderly couple in traditional
attire stepping out, accompanied by a young man with a basket of fruits and
flowers. Confusion and alarm crossed his face as he realized another young man
was already inside, speaking with Deepa."
He rushed back in, where Deepa and the young man were
warming up to each other, and asked, “Who are you, Sir? What brought you here?
Why did you want to meet Deepa? I think there has been a mistake.”
“Yes, Sir, I was also wondering at the warm reception. I had
a lead that Deepa was planning to take an insurance cover. I had come to meet Deepa
regarding that. I am an officer in a multinational insurance company,” he said.
Meanwhile, the elderly couple entered the hall, accompanied
by a short man with a pronounced paunch and a peculiar face.
"As Deepa hurriedly started leaving the hall, her face
a mix of disappointment and bewilderment, the young man handed her his card
with a charming smile. 'Please call me when you’re free, and we can discuss
your needs,' he said, adding with a wink, 'Maybe over coffee?'".
"Surely," she said with a smile.
Your stories with a twist, like this one, are particularly good!!
ReplyDeleteDid Deepa reject the other guy just for his physical appearance alone ? Well, it is her life and her choice , I guess. 😊
ReplyDeleteChitra Solomon
Ha ha..what a twist
ReplyDeleteVery nice story with an option for the readers to draw their own conclusions. To me it is quite obvious that they must have met at the coffee shop to discuss their respective needs.
ReplyDeleteThat is why it is said, "Marriages are made in Heaven".
Regards
Nice story 🙏🙏
ReplyDeleteExcellent twist. Brought a smile in my face.
ReplyDeleteA very sweet short story with a pleasant suspense! Atin Biswas
ReplyDeleteSurely she would have married the insurance guy. Wish good luck to them.PK Ramachandran
ReplyDeleteSort of guessed that the first guest to arrive was not the one the family was expecting.. probably knowing your style made me realise this. A well thought out narrative certainly … and I like the end as it leaves the reader guessing the final outcome!
ReplyDeleteNice twist ramakrishnan.a.
ReplyDeleteA good one. I loved the narrative. Hopefully Deepa made the right choice. Keep posting
ReplyDeleteNice story....It must have been difficult for the parents to send back the other groom's family....Sandhya
ReplyDeleteThe caravan keeps moving on at its own sweet pace!
ReplyDeleteHowever, the very title 'An unexpected visitor' tells it, at least by some degree!
Just a small idea, if I may! Wouldn't a simple title like 'The visitor' have kept the surprise element under the wraps till the end in a better way!
Ha ha! I Wonder if the prospective groom at least had his share of ‘bajji-sojji’ 😃
ReplyDeleteHa ha :) Loved the twist. Curious to know what happens next ;)
ReplyDeleteIn today' s Dinamalar daily newspaper there is a story close to this story. The boy for whom elder of two daughters was chosen attended formality of 'girl seeing 'with usual sojji bajji (sweetmeats). Later Boy's parents informed girl's parents the boy would prefer to marry the younger daughter. This put girls parents and the sisters in an embarassing situation. The elder daughter was wearing a saree in a traditional style and the younger one was in salwar kameez,both equal in good looks otherwise.
ReplyDeleteWhile they were debating how to reply to boy's parents,two girls visited a nearby temple. The boy too was there per chance and enquired about the acceptance of his proposal to marry the younger sister. The younger sister spontaneously replied that she too was attracted by his companion rather himself.
Now you can imagine what reply girls parents would have conveyed to the boy's parents.
Jagadeesan
Can we assume that Deepa took the insurance cover as well became a partner for life over the cup of coffee, of course convincing her parents!
ReplyDeleteLiked the twist in the story, leaving us guess and ponder.
I liked the story. The wink in the end was the highlight. Destiny will tell us what happened to Deepa!
ReplyDeleteNice twist to the story
ReplyDeleteNow waiting for the sequel to this story with more twists and turns!!
ReplyDeleteஎன்னங்க நடக்குதிங்கே?😃😎
ReplyDeleteBest wishes and warm regards
Hemantha Kumar Pamarthy
Very interesting. Amazing the way you write the stories. I would think that Deepa would convince her parents and not just take the insurance cover but also take him as her life partner. You are a rockstar!!! Keep writing and we will keep reading.
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